Rydia

A very interesting little script here with some well developed characters. Perhaps add a brief description of the setting at the beginning and a slight touch of character description would ...

Hehe. The CRA have been around longer then you think...

As Kitty was approaching The Oink Star, her phone began to vibrate again. It was a message from Alice - I hear your ship is still under construction. Should I ...

That's great Adam! Perhaps I'll join you on a few missions, that would be lots of fun =)

I love this. The detail is equisite and your choice and use of colour is brilliant. I particularly like the horns and the texture of the fur but that's a ...

I love the outfit! Your work with tone is very good in most places (though that shadow under the arm does need some fading out) and I think her necklace ...

I think the hat needs some work but love the shading and you have a fantastic style. I prefer the bigger, more detailed guy because I'm a fan of realism ...

"Yes, very," Scipio agreed as they headed down the streets, leaving a trail of copper and silver coins behind them as the money trickled from the hem of Alice's dress. ...

Guarding against the unexpected sounds like fun =)

Not quite as random and funny as the first but I liked it. You have a rather fluid, naturally comic style and generally it was entertaining. You might want to ...

I would say that it's awful just to be different but honestly, it's really cute. I love the lighting and the wall texture. Very nice.

It made me smile and in doing so it fulfilled a purpose and therefore it can not be said to be completely random and even if it is, who cares? ...

I think this needs quite a lot of work. You have the basics of a beautiful poem but you need some major corrections to your grammar and such. My advice ...

The first one is beautiful but I agree that you have too many stars in the background. The second one is very pretty too, wonderful pattern, great colour and the ...

I like the added conflict in this chapter and I'm glad you decided to keep posting your story. Here's the usual list of suggestions - But now Myvel and Rezlel ...