Rydia

I'd never considered doing that actually and I might try it. Only for the sake of doing so though and a bit of fun. I don't think it's something I'd ...

I've heard of this one actually though I think it was a while ago and I wasn't too interested at the time. I'll add it to my list. (And yeah, ...

Wow, that sounds rather twisted. I might take a look.

I like humour and if there are snow leopards then I practically have to check it out. I'll add it to my list.

I read this one about a year ago and it was pretty good but not the best I've read. Still, if you're looking for a pleasant, fantasy book, I suggest ...

Oooh, I keep meaning to read this one. My friend bought me it a while back and it looks really good.

A short tip and I'm not sure that I agree. Generally because is much better but when there are too many syllables, shortening because isn't always such a bad idea.

How strange. I'd not heard of that before. I think I know a few words I'd like to see less frequently but banning them? That's going too far.

Sounds like a really good book. I'll add it to my list.

Hello again, thought I'd take a look at the next part too. Again, I'd advise against the full caps and I think you need to slow down your action a ...

Hmmm. I think this has the potential to be a really good start but it needs a little work. I'd suggest that you don't write in capitals to show shouting. ...

Hmmm. This is too short to be a story and it feels more like a summary or perhaps a prologue? Either way, I think you should change the format and ...

This is an interesting little piece. I love how you start off but you drift into a stronger form of second person towards the end which isn't quite as powerful ...

Raven When I reached the outside of the cave, I held my arms out to the light and closed my eyes, taking deep, fulfilling breaths of air and allowing the ...

Hi there! My first suggestion is that you check your format before posting - don't just copy and paste the text. Also, cut this down into seperate stanzas so that ...