Rydia

Yeah =) Lydia "There, that looks better. What colour top would you like? I have a white one or there's this green one or a blue one. I bet the ...

Scipio "That's good," Scipio murmured absently as he removed the helmet from his swollen head. "Scipio, your head!" Alice exclaimed worriedly but her companion was too exhausted to take any ...

Lydia "Why have you left that in there?" I asked, shaking my head reproachfully. "Come on, you need to take it out or it will only burrow in deeper." The ...

I'm not quite so fond on this part. You info dump a lot and Meg's becoming a bit too much of an angsty teen. Try not to have such long ...

Yeah. Two caves. Lol. Sorry for the confusion...

Yeah, he is. Lethero and Sasquash's characters are with mine and Ayra now also in a cave and yours is with TN's.

Hello again! I like the action you have and Meg's a very welll established character but I think you need to add a little more description. For example, rather than ...

Lydia "Oh good, I do love company. I have company so rarely actually but then, I suppose that's what happens when you're on your own. How strange that a storm ...

Hello again. I like this one quite a lot. It's not the most original theme but you make a good point and you have some nice imagery. I think you ...

Don't worry, you're doing fine. Lydia "Hey," I protested as the girl shook herself, scattering more water everywhere. "Don't do that. We can put the fire out just fine by ...

Ayra, is your character approaching the other two or our group of three? I'm a little confused...

(We're under an oak tree, Lethero.) Lydia "Do you live around here or was you just passing through? Oh look, the rain is easing! We should head to the cave ...

Hello again! I think your action moved a bit fast and it all seemed quite random but generally I liked this piece. The character development seems to be improving and ...

I think you have a nice theme here but the words need quite a lot of work and more punctuation would help it flow better. Your imagery is a little ...

Hello there and welcome to the site, it's lovely to meet you! What are your interests Hetzie? Other than writing that is. And if you have questions or are interested ...