Rydia

Well done Suzie, you're on your way to even greater things! But when you're famous, I'm sure this moment will still mean the world to you. We're all so very ...

Via - That makes 26 so I owe you another three critiques. Make sure you get in touch =) DesperateRomantic - Thanks for the help! Points have been donated.

Raven I stumbled back a step, losing concentration as the Goblin archer dropped in front of me, arrow through the head. Karana's work. Nicely done. Now concentrate. I slipped deeper ...

I really like this poem! Very amusing and certainly easy to relate to. I agree that a more standard rhythm would benefit it though . Here's a few suggestions - ...

I like this Azila. You have some beautiful description and the atmosphere is well set but I think it could be stronger. You need to take into account all five ...

Cathy I suddenly didn't know what to do. I had expected some sort of greeting, some sort of magnificent welcome but here I was, alone and staring up at my ...

Raven I felt Luke crash into my back, catching my hair as he tackled me to the ground. "Luke, get off me! What's the big idea?" I demanded angrily. I ...

My room. Or in front of the computer. Though I think deeply a lot of time so when I'm wandering around college or whatever as well.

Thank you, that makes it 15 so I owe you another critique.

Hi there Twit, just realised that you're rather low on time for making edits to this so I suppose I can stay up a little longer. I like what you ...

Luke "Let's take a vote," I suggested, refusing to raise my voice above their argument but the cold, steady tone seemed to have the desired affect. There were reluctant nods. ...

Kate "Any advance on a dark room?" Lindsay sighed. "Maybe somewhere in Hogsmede? Or under Hogwarts?" I suggested. "Yeah, it has to be close by," Lindsay agreed. "Why?" Sara asked. ...

Oh gosh. I finish my maths homework only to find someone talking about the same problems I've been forcing my way through? Okay so you know what to do but ...

Oh yeah, two of the ones you listed were your freebies. Sorry about that. I shall correct my post...

It is quite amusing but I think it could have been more imaginative. It starts off as an extension on the whole 'the dog ate my homework' excuse which didn't ...