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I just checked my closet.... YOu wasn't there. Everyone is and idiot which means no one is. extreme swing jumping!??

Thank you for your reveiw. :mrgreen: I will certainly listen to your comments. :D Oh and the reason why he can work at the service station is: all New Jersey ...

On a scale of 1 to 10, I'd give this a 7. For me, it was a nice reading experience,visualizing the main character wandering through NYC and interacting with the ...

Thanks for the comments all of these were helpful :)

I think I see what you're trying to do.It's a different approach to writing I've never seen before.......I LOVE IT! Very clever,especially in the beginning. I like how "we" went ...

AT first when I noticed the short length. I didn't know what to think. I thought you might be one of those writers who try to write some quick garbage ...

Don't get mad or anything, but this piece is amateur. What all the other reviewers are saying is definitely true. You need more voice, more sentence variety,and a more consistent ...

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I'm having trouble visualising how someone strapped to a bed can be handed something. Perhaps it would be better if he released the main character before handing him/her the bag ...

Um.... I know I have grammr mistakes. It's no big deal, if you don't want to to write it down, but if you do- please do. thhe grammar is the ...

I need help making a character for a fifteen yr old RICH girl living in Seattle, but only with dad and maid. :lol: :!: Prefferably, Realistic character (One who could ...