RoxanneR

I like this, especially the names, which make it seem like it is supposed to be set a long time ago. Is it? I also like the crack about the ...

Yeh, it's cute for a little kid! I love cats and you can see that this is just the same as any! RR*

It's not a story, it's a poem!

There are a few grammatical errors, but on the whole it was good. I like the history at the beginning. That really drew me into reading the story. A bit ...

I like this, but I'm not clear about a few things: Is this a prologue or a first chapter? What sort of time period is this set in? Thanks RR*

I like the story, and the characters seem very developed. I like all the little things that really add to the big picture. Do you have any more? RR*

It's not really a story, but it's perfect for a scary sleepover! RR*

Thanks for all those comments, guys. I did just paste it out of word (I couldn't be bothered to type it all out again!) I always think it's a bit ...