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  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Connection - 1 (The Unholy Info Dump)

    Here for another review. You're a great storyteller. Your descriptions are so detailed. Like before, I will repost a portion of your work that I edited. __________________________ "And they didn't ...

    Dec 30, 2021

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Connection - Chapter 46

    Hi, here for a quick review. Sort of... I love your storytelling. You're really good. Keep it up. Only criticism is not to be in a hurry because you miss ...

    Dec 30, 2021

  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Narrative
    Re: Hypochondriac: Chapters 1-3

    I'm blown away by how good this is. Your writing is beyond reproach. It's so good that it felt at times like I was reading an already published work. I ...

    Jul 7, 2019

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Chapter Fifteen

    Hi, there. I like this. The story line is something I could roll with. However, there are a few things that you could work on. Let's start with the dialogue. ...

    Jul 3, 2019

  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, General
    Re: Ikoya Downtown - Chapter One

    Hi, there. You've got a good idea going here, you only need to work a little bit on the execution. Right off the bat I noticed your preference for big ...

    Jul 3, 2019

  • Other » General, General
    Re: Magazine

    Sounds like a great idea. Firstly you need to identity your target audience. That will help you figure out what on earth you're going to put in your magazine. If ...

    Apr 23, 2017

  • Short Story » Spiritual, Humor
    Re: Before the Council

    I actually thought you wrote this, and was about to shower you with praises. The English bible is very well written. Wish I could write like that. I think I ...

    Apr 23, 2017

  • Poetry » Satire, General
    Re: If I Only Had An Apple

    Wow! This is pretty sincere and direct. It is also easy to read. I like it when something i s easy to read, and it's something I've been trying to ...

    Apr 23, 2017

  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Horror
    Re: .

    Ok, deep breath! This is really good for your first venture into horror. There isn't enough praises that would accurately represent what a great job you've done here. Boy oh ...

    Jan 16, 2015

  • Article / Essay » Realistic, Culture
    Re: Blank Draft

    This is a thought provoking piece. Questions about life, truth and what it all means are not easy to answer and like you've said everyone has his/her own version of ...

    Jan 13, 2015

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: A Little Girl Grew Up In Here

    For your first attempt at poetry, I must say this wasn't bad. The format definitely threw me off and I actually thought it was deliberate, but you explain it wasn't ...

    Jan 12, 2015

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: Why Are We So Stubborn?

    This is deeper than the Loch Ness. As the other reviewers have said below, you've managed to capture human nature with so few words. It's impressive. All this poem needed ...

    Jan 10, 2015

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Computer

    Hahaha! This is brilliant, easy to miss but once you get it it's not just witty but brilliant. So many folk throw away their lives before a computer screen, and ...

    Jan 10, 2015

  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative
    Re: Do You Remember?

    Aww sweet! My immediate question though is, is this fiction or faction? And secondly if it is faction, how old is the author? If I may be so bold to ...

    Jan 10, 2015

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic
    Re: Whiskey and Tears.

    Profound. The way you've captured with the power of words the immense guilt of forbidden love is impressive. The blame is put squarely on the shoulders of lover and not ...

    Jan 10, 2015


You know what the big problem is in telling fantasy and reality apart? They're both ridiculous.
— The 12th Doctor