Rosalie

he flew like some kinda indigenous angel. 'cept maybe his wings was made outta tv dinner trays. - Smoke Signals It started at first with a little rain. Plop, plop, ...

Hey, Abigail! I thought that the idea behind this story was wonderful--I've been in that barber chair before. (Not the one with the cancer; just the friend.) It's a really ...

Hey, Blackbird! I'm going to be honest--I just read Spork's review, and I suppose I'm really dumb. I'm not exactly Captain Subtle, but I really didn't understand this piece. But ...

Hey, Maddy! You said you wanted nitpicking, but I'm not very good at that, so I'll do a little of this, a little of that. On the harsh, concrete floor ...

Hey, Zayrastriel! I agree with Spencer--tough topic, but you handled it artfully. I'm especially a fan of this paragraph: Children know everything. It’s a confusing sort of paradox – wisdom ...

Hey luckystar--can you take this down? You can post stuff by other writers on your blog, but don't post it in the literary forums or people will think that you ...

Hey, Flit! Oh goodness. This story was adorable. I am a fan. I especially loved the milkman--sweet and simple. And, again, adorable. Another thing that I like about it is ...

Hey, JaneThermopolis! This is a really solid piece. I felt like the English class intro was a little too cutesy, but you worked around that effectively. Call me a first-semester ...

Hey, servant4christ! Blood dripped from my fingers and the stench of flesh filled the air. This is a really interesting first line. It got me hooked--however, in the following paragraph, ...

Hey, Lydia! I'm going to critique this as a childrens' poem. If this was not supposed to be a childrens' poem, honey, perhaps we need to talk. That fuzzy, wuzzy ...

It's gadigadigadigadigadi! (A cookie if you guess who this is.) That was good, for your age. ...just kidding. If not a bit strange for your age. I think that's the ...

Hey, 015042! What a great ending. I didn't even realize that you had no sensory description until I read that line--and then went back and read the whole thing again. ...

Hey, RosieBaker! This is short. Short's okay--a break for reviewers, I guess--but in general, try to keep your posts around 500 words or more. More words, more room for mistakes, ...

Hey, SnapesonaPlane! Your style is really solid and really beautiful--I love it, and I hope to read more of it. 1. Reasons The most important thing that was missing in ...

Hey, CorrineIone! This is really short (and I'm not sure what a teaser blurb is supposed to be), so I'll just hit the highlights of style/characterization that you can carry ...