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Re: Twilight Skies (Excerpt)
Thanks, both of you. I know i have a long long way to go. This was just a part, i didn't write this twice by the way. It was just ...
Sep 20, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Skies (Excerpt)
Hey all. This is a segment of Twilight Skies which i am deciding whether or not to keep based on your much valued critiques! The other Twilight Skies i posted ...
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Re: Wrath of a Grecian Moon
A well structured beginning that has left me wanting more! I strongly suggest that anyone reading this piece read the second and third chapters as the plot is hinted at ...
Sep 20, 2009 -
Re: Still Untitled- Part 1!
Hey. I like your story alot. The splitting headache and blood boiling beneath her skin...and her being unable to keep up with sword skills. I think i know where this ...
Sep 20, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Skies (R13 -Contains coarse language)
Thanks. I will be keeping the core concept of this piece but likely (I'm not entirely sure yet) do a restart in a different setting. Also I've found myself exceptionally ...
Sep 13, 2009 -
Re: Wrath of a Grecian Moon (3)
Once again brilliant. I am beginning to envy your slower but more intense writing style. I agree with much of what Bickazor has said in his very long and thorough ...
Sep 13, 2009 -
Re: Wrath of a Grecian Moon (2)
Hey. What little there was to critique has been critiqued already. I just have to say that YES you should continue this. You give a crystal clear view of the ...
Sep 11, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Skies (R13 -Contains coarse language)
Thanks everyone for your reviews. I will be putting everyone's feedback to use ASAP! Karsten i see what your saying. I was especially worried about the cliche elements to this ...
Sep 9, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Skies (R13 -Contains coarse language)
Twilight Skies (R13 -Contains coarse language) Chapter 1 “Ali, what is WRONG with you? Care to explain it for the benefit of us normal girls?” Chelsea smirked as her minions ...
Sep 9, 2009 -
Re: Falling Below Zero - Chapter 1
Hi. Its very intriguing. My need to know what happens next continued to build through the whole chapter. I don't know what it's about but i love the way you ...
Sep 9, 2009
