RoachRedford!

Yeah Chase and Chinner are the same, because Chase is pretending to be him. Benji doesn't know. I think most of your confusion would be certainly sorted by reading the ...

If you ever need advice/more explanation I'm happy to help with all things computers/military as far as writing authenticity goes. Let me know if you need anything else :) Merry ...

I still think you're missing my my point, but all the best.

Hacking doesn't really look like anything, most of the time. It's a pretty boring and uneventful undertaking in the real world. Depending on how it works, it's usually messy and ...

3000 B.C is over 5000 years in the past. Also, the code you've put in here is still a massive wall of meaningless text. If you want to illustrate the ...

Just to clarify: The term armada refers to ANY fleet, so if you're going to call it an armada, it really needs to a have a proportionate rank leading it, ...

Thanks heaps. I definitely agree that this is Chapter One and not a Prologue. I'll probably change that. Thanks for the feedback.

Haha, oh wow. The Alec Baldwin thing was totally unintentional. I have a teacher called Mr. Baldwin so I used his last name and threw the first name that came ...

Yeah a glossary might help for sure. Yeah that makes heaps of sense actually, and I think you could probably weave that description into the narrative somewhere. Keep up the ...

Hey there guys, thanks so much for the critiques! I added an extra paragraph to this section which gives a little more information (but not too much!) No, this isn't ...

Thankyou so much everyone for this. As of now, I have made these changes and will re-upload very soon; - Switched from 1st person to 3rd person - re-edited some ...

and of course, thanks Vincent.

thanks heaps for that, will take note and do some more reasearch! :)