Rivercool99

Hi, Very interesting, I am very undecided about his poem. I love the wording and it gives you a deep, dark, sad, feeling inside of me. But at the same ...

Hi, Very interesting, I really don't get the story at all whatsoever but you make up for it with the beauty of your poem. Did you start out the poem ...

hot chocolate By River Shields swirling chaos of our world a cup of hot chocolate swirly chocolate chaos but upon all this are Marshmallows the few people in our world ...

Interesting and somewhat dark, but the ending was mellowed out and surprised me with the amount of feeling in it. (-: I think you should write other poems sorta like ...

The Time Capsule  By River Shields   It did not begin today but twelve years ago; it began with the ticking of an old watch and the gleam of a ...

Stories by River Shields Looking out the window of the car Hundreds of cars speeding around like insects running from a predator Each car filled with one, two, three, maybe ...

Undeniably a poem I have just fell in love with. Beautiful descriptions and metaphors. Didn't really understand the storyline but a lot of poems have one. I take my hat ...

I like your hard science writing you obviously did you research. I also like how you described the comet. I would recommend a little bit of editing in some parts, ...

Amazing descriptions and characters I love it. Reminds me of Lord of the Rings

The Heavy Weight of the Grass By River Shields My name is Number One, which is because I am the first; I am the first and the only one. No ...

The Shadow by River Shields 5:30 My shadow stretches long and far stretching its muscles in the morning sun 9:00 My shadow stands tall and straight standing my own hight. ...