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Re: Dangerous Thoughts
There comes a sadness deep within, That sings a solemn tune, Tiptoes oh-so-sneakily, Like silky sudden poison. It bursts through vessels of the mind, Sinking to the core, Seeping with ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Tea Time
The moon shattered, And darkness broke free, Creeping ‘round corners, Looking for me. Misery loves company, So put on the tea, Stir in some cyanide, And bring it to me. ...
Mar 17, 2011 -
Re: Tale of a Nose Picker
Oh dear....hahahah! Simply hilarious.
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Counting the Stars
How absolutely adorable! Very lovely poem. My only critique would be just small issues with the rhythm...Love it!
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: The Last Art
Although I loved this and it is indeed quite intellectual. I'm going to be bold and do the opposite of what everyone else just did, I'm going to give you ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: In Sanity
This is brilliant! I tried to search for something to critique but I just couldn't come up with anything negative. I love it. I felt like I was tumbling down ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Teddy Bear
I had a little teddy bear, Cuddly, fluffy and white, She'd keep away the monsters, That came out in the night. Her name was Mrs.Teddy, And she wore a pretty ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Sanctuary
Take me to sanctuary, Where my peaceful soul lies, No more heavy burdens-- Or trouble filled eyes. This heaven that I long for, Is it but a dream? It does ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Mirror, Mirror
This is definitely one of my favorites. Being someone who is quite interested in psychology, I very much enjoyed this and found your delivery of such an emotional theme very ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: I am the Apple
I know I'm supposed to give some kind of constructive review, so I didn't review this the first time I read it. Then, the title caught my eye once more ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Somewhere Over The Rooftop.
This poem is very simple, yet quite lovely and easy to relate to. I agree with the others in terms of their critiques, however I would also like to add ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: deleted
I found this incredibly clever! You've portrayed a very powerful theme in just a few only critique is that the rhythm could be much better balanced...perhaps balancing out the syllables ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Son of the moon
First of all...I love this! Son of the moon - Slightly edited - That red sky tonight, means the moon is on fire. Your black tongue, hints you’re a pretty ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Unique.
Woops! I wrote this quite a while ago and posted the unedited version! Thank you for pointing those out :) Made the changes...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Unique.
Happiness in its entirety, Has hidden itself so well, Never has it shown itself to man, For fear that he would tell. If he saw more than a peek, How ...
Mar 6, 2011
