RileyStone

Hey would you mind reviewing my prologue?

Interesting. It's not the most captivating, that's probably something you could work, but I did like it. You description was awesome, I was convinced by everything you character was thinking ...

First impression: very nice. I love the faces and expressions. Especially the hair, it just seems to fall nicely. One thing I think you could work on is folds and ...

Okay, I absolutely adored this. It's totally unique and held my interest the whole way through. I'm dying to read more, seriously. My only problem with it was that I ...

Alright, first things first. I have to ask... are you really 12? This is amazing for a twelve year old, far beyond where I was at this age. Keep writing, ...

I like it, beginning is a bit slow, but it picks up and holds my attention after some of the other characters pop it. I like Jason's personality and character. ...

Overall, I liked it, but didn't love it. However, the ending really sold it for me. I loved how much personality the female character has, the impatience and attitude was ...

I would strike up a conversation with them. Probably say something lame about the weather, mention its a long way down, ask what they're doing out here. Be friendly, not ...

I absolutely hate Miley Cyrus's music. Especially Party in the USA. Ughhhh... drives me crazy. Oh yeah and I have to agree, Party Rock Anthem is pretty obnoxious. And don't ...

Ah, I needed this. Great idea! Raven ran, auburn strands whipping behind her. Her worn converse slammed against the damp sidewalk as she weaved between strangers. She could feel their ...

My character's name is Jacinta Rae. Fifteen-year-old Jacinta was recently declared a Beauty and taken from her family and home in the Southern Camps after watching her brother be shot ...

Christmas has been pretty good besides the fact my sister woke up everyone in the house before 6 o'clock. Best gift was a digital camera with a screen in the ...

I'm liking the new site, the blue works. I can be patience for the rest now. :) Glad I found this though, I was a tab bit confused when I ...

Hmm... interesting question. This is kinda terrible of me, but honesty I'd go with Beauty. I'm a 16, female. Just so you know.

Just adding to Tiffanyann's reply. Make sure that you start a new line every time someone new talks. "It's lunch time." said her mother. "Can I take it to Zoe's?" ...