Riedawriter23

Whoa! This was amazing! Ah, now my head is ringing with what's to happen next. You surprise me everytime I read another post! I love how you had Kyle's ass ...

Ha! I loved this. At first I was thinking that it was some sort of scene being formed and then the way you introduced the card game was great, however, ...

Okay let me start out by saying this sounds really interesting. I like the plot you've created but a few things could be edited. First of all you need to ...

In the beggining I really liked this, but towards the end it did seem like more rhyming from the first couple of lines was needed. It was sort of choppy ...

I really liked the meaning of this poem. It was short, but far from simple, it really made me think and I enjoyed how much you put into so little ...

This was a good start with the rhyming but I really think that if you start it out that way then it should continue. You also need to put your ...

“You’re dying.” Liza announced, hoping that it didn’t sound too much like a renunciation and emitting one prudent look toward her High Master. The old woman to the side of ...

Ha! I loved this! Very interesting and very clean with great descriptions. Awesome job on the whole thing I had a fun time reading about Buddha. lol. Keep at it! ...

I really enjoyed this. I think the way you showed your characters looks and personalities was well drawn out and your method of fantasy creatures crept into the readers interest ...

This was really nice as a short poem. When I first saw it I thought that it possible wasn't going to have enough but after reading through it had just ...

This is so beautiful. I love the flow and the rhyming that appears at the perfect moments. I can't find anything wrong with it, which is also a great sign, ...

It needs something but I can't put my finger on it. I'm thinking maybe a more loose complex. It was kind of straight-line-ish, it would be really nice if you ...

Really beautiful word usage. I loved how the lines were played out, the grammar and spelling were alright as others have already commented on, but altogether, I loved this. Keep ...

This was really nice but I felt you were attempting much detail without getting as much as the poem needed. If it was added to and really thought through this ...

This was really interesting. I loved it as well, the way it flowed and the words you used were excellent. I too have been told that garter snakes didn't bite, ...