Riedawriter23

He's going to betray Jon?! I don't think he can, can he? Jon is like the world to him right? And Ariel has no feeling for Jon or Kyle whatsoever? ...

Wow, I love the perspective you put it in, it really works. Fluer's point of view is very interesting, I mean, I always felt that he was seriously going to ...

This was really nice Bradness. I always love reading your poetry. One question though: It sounds like your narrator is getting ready to have someone over for dinner, for the ...

This poem has wonderful meaning but, there are some parts that can be taken out to make it better as well as some spelling errors. 1.Friends will come friends will ...

This flowed really well. I liked the dialect you used, it really...umphed up the poem I guess I should say. Though, I'm sensing mixed feelings throughout? I see that the ...

Poor Sarah! I actually kinda feel bad for her now. She almost got raped and now she's in France?! I swear I couldn't predict any of this even if I ...

Chooky, I think he means that Jon looked at Kyle when he didn't think Jon was looking." as in, "he" stands for Kyle. "Jon looked at Kyle when he didn't ...

You certainly know how to twist and turn a plot Brad. I mean, at first I was confused because even I was wondering...hasn't this happened before? But when I recognized ...

Omg. That was badass. When you said answers...I thought you were joking with me to be totally honest. Chionophobia is a secret agency? Sadly that means I was wrong when ...

Great edits Andy. And I really like the new name. I can really sense the feeling you added. I'm actually sorry for her and yet excited. What is she going ...

Wow. Again, great ending. I wasn't too concerned about the agent part that Clau was talking about because, well we don't have to know where Jon is if Jon doesn't ...

Ah! That was fantasic. lol and funny, I can so relate to that. Sometimes I just want to throw my straightener to the wall and let my hair go wild ...

Oh my, not Bradness! lol this was really funny and from title I only had the slightest feeling that this was about Brad...sadly. And then throughout I was like: wow ...

Okay the first thing I noticed was that your format was off. Try to put spaces between your paragraphs as not to confuse your readers, that helps you to get ...

Okay let me start off by saying, great choice of words and meaning and nice story line. But I have a question. Who are you talking to exactly throughout the ...