Riedawriter23

Awww Linds. This was really good. Change your title though so it proves to be more intruiging. lol *cries* Keep at it! ~Rieda

This was interesting. It had great word usage and really strong feeling behind it, though I think you should change the title? The title is a little demeaning and amatuer ...

This is really interesting. I don't think I've read anything with this plot and, as many stories prove to be cliche, you did a great job on reality. Also, you ...

This was very nice. I like how you separated your lines. It made this look very clean and as far as I saw there were no errors. Great job on ...

Monkeys! So cute, so cuddly, of course them, why not? *takes out monkey flag and lights candels*

I loved it Andy! I agree on your side as well so that helps. lol:) Here is my version at 1478 words: ----------------------------------------------------------- Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. M

Oh that's wonderful Brad! I mean I knew that Jon couldn't hurt Kyle...but Kyle, I can't really say that I know for sure he's not taking Jon away. I hope ...

This was really interesting and for grade 3? Nice job. I won't be too harsh, lol, it was only the fact that some lines seemed forced to rhyme and didn't ...

Nice job with word usage and lines. But I couldn't help but noticing that your punctuation is off. There are so many commas and not enough periods. Other than that, ...

I love the ending of this, but the beggining is a little sketchy. Also(and I know this happens a lot in poetry) you repeated yourself a lot. I'm not just ...

This is very interesting. I liked the beggining part no doubt but the end sort have surprised me. I expected that to happen, but I mean I was also expecting ...

Awww, this was sad. I really do love your description and everthing though. It flowed like a story/poem, I liked it that way. I understood exactly what you were saying ...

This was really good Snoink. I like how we found out one thing at a time and how you didn't crowd it with information in the first sitting. The way ...

Wow! Bomb ending. There are so many different ends in which to love Ch. The pain, some happiness(lol), relationships, science and medical problems. Your reader is learning as they're reading ...

This was great Bubbles! I don't think I've ever read your poetry, but I love what I read. *As she walks to work, she catches a glimpse of that girl ...