Riedawriter23

I like the...feeling behind this poem, but the way it was presented did make me feel anything towards the narrator or the situation. Work on broadening your vocabulary in this ...

As I sit and think about my life, I think about how many lives I’ve ruined, how I filled them with pure strife, and don’t know why they didn’t make ...

Written in twenty minutes for that contest of Ryan's... Darren gazed across the park from his place in the shadows, watching his target shoot hoops with his friends. **Target? He's...stalking ...

Lol, I'm actually glad to have this reaction because there are some major twists to this story and you're all following the perfect path! :p This was just part of ...

I'm not so sure where this is going to go. Hopefully I'll like the idea enough to turn it into a novel. Crit away! Hi Vampgrl607![ 9:05pm] [Eahottie05 has logged ...

The homuculus smiled as it drew in power. Now the mortals would see! It grinned, its little heart racing. **I think you need to make the beginning sentence a littl ...

*gasp* well at least I'm on one list. *points at Matt* So, my list of "10" ;) 1.Staring_at_ceiling (Linds...even though we see each other all the time XD) 9.Incandescence(Bradness!) 3.Meshugenah ...

This was awesome! Great description and the ending really had me wanting more. I do however want to know what it is your narrator is killing. Could it be people, ...

First of all, full of feeling. I cried reading this and that doesn't happen very often. I also loved the way you put it into second person, great addition and ...

Okay, I did NOT expect the convulsing. lol. Good job on the surprise element. And poor Wyes, if it wasn't bad enough that he was alone, now he has this ...

I really liked this, especially the way you divided it. All the descriptions and analogies were really good. My favoirte was the one for Dolor because, first it was the ...

XD, it wasn't actually about sex. Though, it was really about an extension in general, I was using the case of a wand...but whatever extension that is visualized here is ...

Lol, this sounds awesome already. Great character developement, I already want to know more about them. "You're just jealous," I laugh, standing up to leave. "I bet you offer him ...

Strip me clean, will lyric tools With sheers and cutters, take me off. Cut me short, slice me thin. That lick of need That fuels. Pull me into strands of ...

I'm glad to hear that Jon and Kyle aren't looking for anyone right now. Though, Trent is such a cute little character, he's nothing compared to Kyle. :). And that ...