RedRaven

I liked this poem. The flow was very nice, as was the imagery. I can't wait to read you're novel once you publish it! Good luck with it, RedRaven

Chapter 7 – February 20th My therapist got me to open my mouth today. She threatened that if I didn’t open my mouth, she’d get me to call my mother ...

Chapter 6 – February 17 Therapy is the same old story. The therapist stares at me expectantly, and I shut up for fifty minutes. It’s routine. Do I seriously need ...

Chapter 5: February 14th From my plastic-covered windows, I can see that the snow that’d fallen is starting to melt. It’s only February, but I’m happy about it already. My ...

Chapter 4: February 12th My first therapy session was so exciting a failed attempt on the staff’s part to get us to open up. I locked my lips and threw ...

This piece threw me off a little bit. I enjoyed it, but I do have a few suggestions. 1. Some of your grammer wasn't good. [I'd highlight the bits that ...

Chapter 3: February 11th I was kind of too busy to write anything last week. I’ve been trying to bond with Rebecca, and I’ve been making sure that the nurses ...

I tried to read this, I honestly did. I liked what I read though. To make this smaller, I'd suggest for you to publish each chapter seperately. I think if ...

I liked this. It was very fast paced. The only suggestion I'd have for you would be to put more emotion into it. It's all telling, there's no showing.

Chapter 2: February 8th Nothing really worth writing has happened yet. I got a new roommate today, though. Her name is Rebecca and I don’t know why she’s here. No ...

Thanks for the critique! I'll work on expanding her history and such as the novel progresses.

I liked this. It was a bit confusing in the beginning, but I enjoyed the rest of it.

This was good, but I don't think these two paragraphs fit in with the rest of the story. Other than that, good work! . Isaac’s love of football was always ...

This was really good! I think you should keep writing.

Chapter 1: February 6th I’ve never kept a diary before. The only reason I’m doing it now is because my annoying therapist is making me keep one. She says it’ll ...