RedRaven

Hi Dante, This poem was very interesting! I liked it and I enjoyed your use of imagery. A nit-picky thing though: [quote] Come meet me where the sun shines. This ...

I know it does. I was reading it and decided to use something like it in my novel.

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This was a sad piece. But, it was really interesting. It was nice to see a different side of a suicidal character. I enjoyed it and would like to see ...

Hello! Overall, I liked this piece. It was nicely paced, and I liked your writing style. The only thing nitpick-y that I found with this was: Traffic was still as ...

I sink against my bedroom door and flip open my cell phone. I read my missed call alerts and my mind travels back to the beginning… the unfortunate beginning of ...

I can feel a vibration on my side. I groan and put my buzzing cell phone underneath my pillow. It keeps ringing. But I’m too tired to answer it. The ...

I was obnoxiously woken by Chloe this morning. She came into my room and attempted to call me, like usual. When I didn’t reply, she started to screech at me ...

When I get home, Chloe pounces on me. I greet her before going into the kitchen. Mom is sitting at the island with her elbow resting on the granite countertop. ...

Hours later, I let myself in the house. No one is home, so I run into the bathroom and lock the door behind me – just in case. I stand, ...

“Sophia! Mommy says you have to get up now!” Cold air flows around me as my little sister Chloe drags the comforter of my bed. “Hey!” I protest, clawing for ...

[A/N]: I just thought of this the other day, after reading Wintergirls I based it loosely on one of the chapters, so that's why it might look familliar. -----------------------------------------------

I liked this, espically the way you intertwined pyschology with it. I found it kind of long, but other than that it was good. The only think that I didn't ...

This was an okay poem. I liked some of the lines, but as Jagged said, some don't make sense. Keep writing! - RedRaven

[A/N: This is a collection of short poems that I've started to work on. It's one of my first attempts at poetry, so enjoy!] Wings of a Butterfly Struggling against ...