RedRaven

This was interesting, and slightly creepy. I loved the "sadistic delight" part because it gave the character such a creepy edge. Anyway, good work! :) I'm starting to like your ...

The nurses trust me enough to let me out of the cell… for a little while. They herd me downstairs, into the brightly lit cafeteria. The colourful tables are arranged ...

“Get a doctor in here, stat!” A nurse screeches into an intercom. I open my eyes slowly and my head throbs. I’m lying in my bed, with nurses circled around ...

The room is silent and cold. I shiver and look around nervously. A nurse forcefully taps on my door and barges in. She’s carrying a large purple duffel bag. “Here ...

This was a great poem. One of the best that I've read in a while! It was hilarious. I seriously couldn't stop laughing. Good job! - RedRaven

A/N: I've decided to pick up this novel again and keep working on it. Thanks for reading! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

I liked this. A lot. One little thing I'd suggest to you though would be to fix your punctuation. Oh, and you should divide your poem into stanzas so it's ...

Overall, I liked this poem. I loved your word-choice. One thing I would watch though, would be how you place your words. Some of your poem was a bit confusing. ...

I loved this. The only thing I'd reccommend though is that you expand it. I'd like to see more :P My favourite part of this was Molly's dialouge. It added ...

Taylor sauntered into her first-period History class. Clumps of students sat on desks and socialized. Taylor sat down and took out a binder labelled History . She put it on ...

peanut19 basically covered what I wanted to say. Overall, I liked the poem. It could use some fixing up in regards to puncuation and spelling. It was a good poem, ...

Lauren hopped out of her mother’s Cadillac and carefully walked into the house. She rummaged through her purse and pushed her pink-coated house keys into the lock. It clicked open ...

Like those above me noticed, I have a few things to note: 1. In the beginning, I couldn't tell what was going on. I realized after that the characters were ...

Megan Walsh balanced her Prada tote on her arm while she flipped open her cell phone. She furiously tapped on its black keypad and stopped at the front gates of ...

Sorry if I caused anyone grief! I'll delete this now and re-work it or something. - RedRaven