RedRaven

“Jerry… how do you think she’s coping with the… situation?” Mom’s voice floats up the stairwell. I creep next to the stairs and strain to listen. I’m supposed to be ...

Wow. This was good. I didn't see any grammer errors. I loved the way you wrote it. At first I thought it was just some kind of story, but then ...

“How are you feeling, Chloe?” The red-haired woman sitting in from of me asks, folding her hands over her notebook. I sew my lips shut and focus on the creaking ...

Wow. I really liked this! I'm no expert on poetry or anything, but your poem was really good. My favourite aspect of your poem was how it was written in ...

“Oh, Chloe…” Megan sings from the bathroom. “What?” I question in a high-pitched, annoyed tone. “Come see this!” She calls. “You’ll hate me!” My brows knit together as I walk ...

Chapter 2 I watch Megan’s dark hair spill down her back. She flips it all to one side to reveal the jutting bones in her neck. Envy fills me. She’s ...

A/N: I'll be posting the first draft of my novel, chapter-by-chapter. This is nowhere near the finished product. Enjoy, anyway! ------------------------------------------------------------------------

Oh, sorry if I'm confusing! :( The reason may be because of where I switch POV's in each chapter. In the first chapter, I wrote it from Isabella's point of ...

Chapter Two - Emma I gaze out the car’s window in awe. The sprawling estates and endless blue sky roll past me. Wow, I’m finally free… I turn and stare ...

Prologue Once upon a time, there were two pretty girls named Isabelle and Emma. But, unfortunately, one of them was crazy. With a few twists of fate, Isabelle became Emma ...

I just kind of started writing. I know what I want to write about, and I just wrote a little bit that I'll probably include somewhere else in the novel. ...

This was a nice poem. I liked it. One thing I noticed however, was lack of structure. I noticed that it didn't flow very well, and that you were very ...

Alexis sighed. She rolled her eyes as she strode into the mini kitchen in her dad’s apartment. His girlfriend Penelope was standing over a bubbling pot, suspiciously staring into it. ...

Sophia and Peyton set their lunch trays down on the table. They each pulled a plastic, orange chair from the table and sat. Mackenzie Peters and Alexis DuLac stared at ...

This interested me a lot. I'm looking forward to more :) Nitpick: One thing that caught my attention was how you jammed your sentences together into one long paragraph. To ...