Rebelle

I posted this on TSR, but I have made some critiques and well-planned edits since then. I hope everyone enjoys this new and improved version! He could feel the blood ...

This was... beautiful. I can't even think of another way to describe it. Angel's emotions and struggle to discover what he really wants in life, and all the symbolisms brought ...

I thought it was terribly sad that those girls fell to such things so young... But the emotion and symbolism and imagery in the story really brought it to life. ...

I liked it and the emotion in it, but I had a few focus issues with it. Stanza 6 and 7 seemed very random and didn't really fit the whole ...

Again, I loved the imagery and fantasy in your work. It flows beautifully, and every word has a delicate and nearly hidden meaning. Just a question, but are you a ...

Very sweet and dreamy. Reminded me of pirates and swashbuclking and falling in love with the wrong sort, for some reason. Bravo, all around!

This made me laugh, it was so... random but hilarious I guess. Nice work, even if it is very politically incorrect. But whoever said being politically correct was any fun?

I liked it, the romance of it. Very good descriptions, and the only problem I had was the first few lines of the second stanza. They didn't seem to fit ...

I think you could have done a little more in depth on the "savior" Trebt, saying how maybe she saw him in a different light now or something. Otherwise I ...

I liked the message you were trying to convey about individuality, but some of the stanzas seemed too forced. In the second stanza, if you changed "It's like people." to ...

At first I felt reluctant to read this, just because the beginning paragraphs were so simplistic, but I realize now that that happy, simple way of writing it made it ...

"Remembered" When darkness falls and cities crumble When dust layers shroud and mountains rumble I'll remember When oceans overcome and empires shatter When a lost one calls and feels they ...

"Remembered" When darkness falls and cities crumble When dust layers shroud and mountains rumble I'll remember When oceans overcome and empires shatter When a lost one calls and feels they ...