Reakeda

Name: Reakeda (aka:Reak) Rank: 1 star fighter Organization: YWS Ship/Plane: none Bio: Standing exactly five feet tall, and weighing approximately 115lbs, Reak is small and fast. Her thick brown hair ...

For the most part, this is really good. I agree with the suggestion that Penguin gave, but I have one more thing I'd like to add. The last stanza bugs ...

"As if mocking her of her mistakes" - this line just doesn't sound right. Maybe try omitting "her of" making it "As if mocking her mistakes" ? the fourth stanza ...

Light of Death

I liked this. The description was excellent. The picture it painted sent shivers down down my spine. There is one thing, apart from the mistakes Aet pointed out, that I ...

Thank you to those that reveiwed the Prologue . Your critiques have been very helpful. [pre]“Mars get up.” Toshom commanded, shaking his twin brother. “We need to move on today. ...

Note: This is a Novel I've been working on for about a year now. It is the first book in a trilogy. [pre]“Wake up! Wake up!” The harsh whisper resonated ...

Your decription of Courage is excellent, but I'm curious about what Faith looks like. You say she was more Beautiful than the Moon and mentioned that Courage worried about her ...

This is well written, but I agree with Seraph. It would be more interesting if the introduction were like a story being told by someone. The whole deal with the ...

I'll be sure to do that, Muffin. Now, I'm off to get those reveiws in so I can post my own work. :)

Hello, I'm Reakeda, but you can call me Rea. I'm 18 and I've been writing short stories since I was in the third grade. Now I write Short Stories, Poetry ...