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That was pretty cool, especially since your doing it for your brother. Great work!

I thought the poem was really good, gives a unique perspective. I don't know why some people have to be so critical, it's not like they have to read it. ...

Chapter 2: A Simple Idea The chime of the church bell gave it's dull yet deafening tone as the old oak doors opened and a slender figure stepped through the ...

I think you have a good idea, you just need to make sure your watching simple grammar issues. Nothing major or anything, just being sure you read it to yourself ...

Its a pretty good Idea, but you could definitely make it better by adding more detail. Give more details about your character, your story. Don't rush it, but don't try ...

Kinda makes you grateful for rain even though when you hate storms... Nice description and well placed details. Really gives you a sense of how much the rain impacts our ...

This story was very interesting, considering you based it on something in your real life. Description and dialogue flowed fairly well, and there we're just a few sentence mishaps here ...

Chapter 1: A Story Forgotten. Cold. Everything was cold. Every rock. Every stone. Even the air and the ground. Everything was cold. There were no seasons in the forest. Just ...