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If I wer (were) a car , (punctuation will be fixed in blue) I'd be the fuel Moving the engine . if i (capitalization matters - "If I") were a ...

Whoa. The layout was different, and at first I thought I was reading something else. Then came the mention of the Conquerors and Uclepidies and Diamea...speaking of which, Diamea's dead?! ...

Oooh. Poor Iluve. D: As far as nitpicks go... I don’t care. She was being mean and she shouldn’t have said those things. If she things thinks that I am ...

Hoas is the little girl. That was unexpected. Like Fledge said, it's hard to believe specific dialogue would be remembered from Hoas's dream, as 1. Hoas probably wouldn't remember word ...

Okay, Snoink! First off, love your avvie. It's so cute. Second, haven't read this in a while, so I'm catching up with review day. Poor Solea. She's growing up too ...

I erased the two thirds of elipses after every line and added proper grammar. L ike a cameleon chameleon I change color instantly , wasting my life for lust s ...

The line "your feelings break through" is too short to flow with the rest of your stanza, in my opinion. In fact, the entire poem is too short to evoke ...

Laden and Bush One day M onu was watching news on T.V with his uncle. His uncle asked,"If there is G eorge b ush on one side and on the ...

If life were so simple, why would the bitter rage continue to stay? As if my attiude define who I was. "As if my attitude defines who I am." But ...

How do you know how he feels? How do you know it’s real? How do you know it’s going to work? How do you know when to be scared or ...

And dripped, tasty, from red lips have failed me. What? That makes no sense, whatsoever. Okay, what I think I have gathered from this is that you wrote a letter ...

While it may seem fine to you, the rhyming does seem forced, the lyrics are mostly parallel, and it does seem to wander around with no destination. There's a difference ...

It took me by surprise when you hissed and spouted lies To cover up your insufficiencies and then I? realised That you could make me dance in any way you ...

Hi , there . I am here , Sitting with my legs crossed , Elbows on my knees , Chin on my hand ; My mouth is closed -- My ...

It is raining , Steady and consistent ; I am alone , Safe and consistent . Okay, the repitition doesn't really work here. The second time you say "consistent", I ...