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Re: This is
beautiful. i totally understand. though it was good...i might reconsider the way you broke the lines up. was a bit awkward because i don't really think a pause fit at ...
Feb 14, 2007 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish
but then it would be gone & you wouldn't be able to breath i wish it wasn't so cold in here
Feb 14, 2007 -
Re: A Hero's Tears
Oh everything is amazing now. This all ended quite a while ago but unfortunately I still remember these things I described. I haven't shown it to my mother yet, but ...
Feb 11, 2007 -
Re: A Hero's Tears
They say that heroes never cry. They couldn't be more wrong. I've seen tears cascade down your pallid face for everyone but you. After the foulest words vanished from the ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: A Dying Breed
Well actually if you MUST know, I editted ambition because I realized that lack of puncuation just kind of ruins everything. Haha. Hey you learn something new every day.
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: Ambition
Ahh yes you understood it. *smiles* Finally some intelligence in this world. haha between you and me, my parents didn't understand it. Whatever. =] The whole significance of the 2nd ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish
yes but then because the color the sky is what reflects on water, the water will be yellow too, & it will look like pee. eww i wish i didn't ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: Ambition
A path is laid before my feet. I must journey; trust this dusty queue. Good-bye friends. I will now be nothing but a name. I will squint, be sun-blinded. The ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: A Dying Breed
...lack of rhyme?....I suppose that's the definition of free-verse, eh?
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: tell me about you
I have two options. I DEFINATELY want to go to an Ivy League school and become either... a) a neurosurgeon - I'm leaning more towards this b) a psychiatrist - ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: The Hope of Imagination
It was beautiful. I loved it. It captured such a strong emotion. I don't exactly understand why some of the words are capitalized, but I'm sure there's a reason. I ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: A Dying Breed
While I appreciate your critique, I haven't yet showed this to anyone who couldn't grasp it's meaning. My lack of punctuation is due to poetic license. I don't puncuate...ever. And ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: Mystification
Ummmmmmmmmm...I believe about half of the 2007 collegiate dictionary is stuffed into that piece of work. Just kidding, just kidding. No, I am not the Simon Cowell of poetry critique. ...
Feb 10, 2007 -
Re: A Dying Breed
I drink your words. Your voice is my scripture to this sick religion. Our world is sicker. We are trapped here. Where God is love, God gives life, life is ...
Feb 9, 2007 -
Re: Ticking Heart, Beating Clock
Sweet sadist, the alarm clock that beats inside my heart Ticks away the minutes until we meet once more No sleeping pill, no shield of eyes would hold my slumber ...
Feb 9, 2007
