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Re: "Orion" Chapter 2
Woah. I did NOT see that coming. Please do more! What is the force????
May 15, 2010 -
Re: Fleirzon: People of the Skies) 7-8
The names you used here are very exotic and creative! I think you could slow it down just a bit and give more detail, but other than that, keep it ...
May 14, 2010 -
Re: (also deleted)
Hmmmm...You kept it nice and suspenseful, and, just between you and me, I hope someone dies. I hope It'll be Phoebe. She annoys me. Kill 'er! Keep it up!!
May 14, 2010 -
Re: Wounded chapter three
This was an interesting piece! I think you could try and put it in paragraphs, and it hurt my eyes. I love where this is going! Do more! Do more!
May 14, 2010