RainStormZ

Tanya and Watingforlife, Thanks so much!! :D I was so excited that I actually finished this first half, I posted it right away. I finished it at like 4 in ...

I am very glad that you enjoyed it! :) Thanks so much about the commas, I noticed that this morning when I was proofreading it. I really need to work ...

Thanks so much! I didn't catch those while I was rereading it through for mistakes! Its a good thing, because I am entering this piece into a contest at my ...

It would be interesting to see the little girls first person reaction to the situation. It could be a more intense reading and description than having it in third person? ...

Hmm I've never heard of it. lol

Hi! Thanks for reviewing! Action scenes are always my lacking scenes. They are the toughest to write for me. I can go back and try to clear it up a ...

Thanks guys! I am working right now on the names. I think I really like Aiden as the main character's name, but all the other names are in the process ...

Wow, this was amazing. You captivated the emotions perfectly and the description of everything was on the point. Very realistic, nothing seemed out of place. Very well written. Good Job! ...