Rahul
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Chapter-2 Who is following me???? I saw a dark black sky with no stars. I couldn’t see the ground everywhere it was fogy the white fog covered the whole ground ...
Oct 7, 2011
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Chapter-2 Who is following me???? I saw a dark black sky with no stars. I couldn’t see the ground everywhere it was fogy the white fog covered the whole ground ...
Oct 7, 2011
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okay. the stuff is less but its pretty and good. Its too new. I like the plot. It creates a lot of pain in readers mind. I like the eagerness ...
Oct 4, 2011
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okay the story is little confusing. You know first the story goes on to a road trip, then a dream, then the trip I guess you had many thoughts in ...
Oct 3, 2011
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Well.. The matter is little less, gives a blurred picture of exactly what is happening in the story. Though what you wrote is nice and secondly when you travel back ...
Oct 2, 2011
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It makes you feel dumbstruck.. I just felt like I am the protagonist of the story. The run was like hell! It felt so great, the whole story tightly wrapped ...
Sep 30, 2011
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Chapter-1 Here I remember I looked outside the window, the Sun was playing with the sky, sometimes showing up, and sometimes not, or it was scared as it was thundering ...
Sep 28, 2011
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Its a story of girl Eva Lyons, who along with her friends live a happy, peaceful life but one day she with her friends Alain,Ryan and KIsha where they all ...
Sep 28, 2011
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Its a story of girl Eva Lyons, who along with her friends live a happy, peaceful life but one day she with her friends Alain,Ryan and KIsha where they all ...
Sep 28, 2011
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if you were here near me.. I would have just hugged you.. Awesome story, l liked the character Leon.. Just you are going a way too fast, explain in detail ...
Sep 18, 2011
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Hey, I am surprised you are just Wao!!!! the chemistry between the girl and the boy is just amazing, a cute story.. The story with a little horror. Just mind ...
Sep 16, 2011
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Hey..I Like it just one thing you wrote someone cleared their voice it just pops out.. Write something like this I hear footsteps near me, i shut my eyes but ...
Sep 16, 2011
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Hey..! I like it, just some problems though.. Show some fear in the Protagonist like captiondomdude told you.. i think you didn't mention the protagonist's name till now, that's important ...
Sep 10, 2011
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Well..Its good i like the fears of the protagonist.. Its pretty good just one thing you are going a little bit off the topici guess you are showing the fear ...
Sep 9, 2011
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Well the concept of the story is pretty good but i have few quires the begging ,the ice cream part and the movie part are just not mixed with the ...
Sep 9, 2011
