RGallagher

I just put of a new version of this, and I would love some more feedback and suggestions! Thanks!

NICE!!! Where is this BattleJesus anyway? *goes to NaNoWriMo chatroom* BattleJesus can be found in #NaNoWriMo on

I really liked this. I couldn't spot any nitpicks. (but then again its almost midnight. I'll double check in the morning.) You did a great job with detail. The only ...

Alright I gotta clear things up. This is NOT a prologue. I don't know where you guys got that from, but it's not. I'm not planning on turning this into ...

I did add in an example of his diary entries! And James is the MC and Erik is the boy with the diary... And the I was scared part was ...

Thanks for all the reviews! I've been working a lot on this piece and have been trying to work on a lot of the suggestions you guys have made! I've ...

Just to let all you future reviews know, I did fix the name thing now. =P

Much, much better. The spacing works wonders also, very nicely done. I actually adore this now and there are very few things I would change, though perhaps I would suggest ...