RGallagher

Howdy there! I've got a little free time, so I figured I'd give you a critique! Hope I don't come off too harsh. It was the middle of the school ...

Hey! Welcome to the forums! I am a bit nitpicky in my critiques so bear with me. =] Jackson was like any other orphan. He had lost his parents when ...

Jeff was the mirror image of his father, had his father been a short boy of a young age and very little life plans. Haha that was funny =] This, ...

Ring, ring You need a period or something similar at the end of all of these. You can't just leave off punctuation. "Hey Andy," a familiar voice answered, "listen, you ...

First thing's first. Typos. I noticed a couple that were mentioned earlier, Pumpink should be pumpkin and Halloween should be capitalized. Other than those none really stood out to me. ...