Quibbler

Okay, first of all, I'm not sure why you made the stylistic choice to not have any punctuation. If it was purposeful, I didn't see the reason behind it. Personally, ...

Is there anything else you can comment on? Because the punctuation and uncapitalized letters were intentional. Like many abuse victims, the boy begins to believe he deserves the abuse. Hence ...

the feeling of death darkly. feet knocking floor. one two one two pause and swig. heart hidden deep. He stumbles in, bronze Liquor, rotting tongue/mind. Him: i cower. hope bleeds ...

I love writing , Using a comma here will help this piece to flow. It’s just great. The first two lines of this verse have 4 syllables followed by 3. ...

The best way to find inspiration is to just keep an open mind and be very inquisitive. I'm not much of a poetry person, but I was very inspired to ...

While I didn't see any glaring technical errors, I didn't care for your piece because your narrator bothered me. I thought she had an air of self-importance about her. So ...

Essays are not my strong point. Please rip it to shreds! The steady tempo of my horse’s hoof beats thunder in my ears as we canter around the arena. I ...

While I admire you for channeling your loss into artistic expression, I feel like this poem is incomplete. At its ending, I really have no sense of who the grandmother ...

That was amazing to read. Firefly is one of my favorite TV shows, and while I normally do not like math, this made a lot of sense to me. It ...

I feel like this poem lacks rhythm and flow. I know that it is free form, but even that type of poetry has a certain rhythm to it, even if ...

This is super long, but thank you for reading. Please rip it to shreds, I'm not looking for praise. If you critique, I'll return the favor. My dearest Sophie, The ...

This is super long, but thank you for reading. Please rip it to shreds, I'm not looking for praise. If you critique, I'll return the favor. My dearest Sophie, The ...

I agree with wickedwonder's sentiment. Here are my comments, typed up as I read the piece: I feel detached from the characters because the prose is isolated from any emotion. ...

Okay, I'm not a poet myself (I find the process incredibly difficult and constraining, with the power of diction being tenfold in importance), but I'll do my best to help ...

This was a great post. I see the value of defining Mary Sues and how to avoid them for beginning writers, who use writing as a self-serving escapism, but want ...