PunkLavender

Thank you for reviewing, it really helps! I'll make sure I keep your point about imagery in mind. The off-center feeling that came with the repetition of "it's weird" was ...

I really enjoyed this! It almost seems like the kind of thing to read on stage, at an open mic or something like that. I love the way you tell ...

Thanks for reviewing! It helps a lot!

Thank you so much for the constructive criticism, it always helps!

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Wow, that was really good. I especially liked the line "always two beats, knock-knock like a joke--" for some reason.

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Wow, that was really good. I especially liked the line "always two beats, knock-knock like a joke--" for some reason.

Wow, that was really good. I especially liked the line "always two beats, knock-knock like a joke--" for some reason.