PsychicNinja

My brother posted his SW fanfic? No way?! Time to crit! *rubs hands together* So they all wonder, why me? Each of them could have had a normal childood, but ...

Yay!!! *tackelhuggles* Time to crit your stuff again, Audra-chan! Critting as I read: Gothics are evil, devil worshippers. Blondes are dim witted. Females, especially young ones, are weak and helpless

Well, I haven't read a bad Star Wars book. =P =P Well, I haven't read all of Twilight (stopped after the first chapter). I read the first Harry Potter book ...

Onward I critique! XP Reading as I crit...I mean critting as I read: His eyes were filled with rage and his body had tensed up. I had seen this look ...

Hey howdy! I've come here to crit this fanfic. Oh, it's a Naruto fanfic...? Great, they're my speciality. ^_~ I'll crit as I read, 'kay?: - 7 years old - ...

Hey, there! Naruto specialty...muahaha Anyway, I shall crit as I go: Sakura stared into the mirror of the changing room cubicle that she had incapacitated herself into. Incapacitated herself? That ...

Hello! I'm here for the cookies! Oh...a Naruto fanfic? Sure, why not? I'll crit as I read: Kakashi was lecruting Naruto, Sakura, and Sasuke. They weren't listening. I'm sure you ...

Hey there! Star Wars favorite. Muahahaha... :D Laser fire on the left, laser fire on the right. So first of all, I think you should choose a better word other ...

Hi, here as I promised! Critting as I read: The ally ways began too clear of its shadows I believe you were looking for "alleys". ^^ And "to". You also ...

Hi! This is a very powerful poem with excellent word choice and imagery. ^_^ Good work. A life in a face, how odd— a bittersweet opus of ivory and blood. ...

Konbanwa, Lizzy-chan. Critting as I go: The white haired boy opened his eyes, to see he was in a log cabin room. You need a hyphen between "white" and "haired". ...

This was very good. I enjoyed it. You need to add in your capitalization and puncuation. I think you need expand on it more and add more similes, personification, and/or ...

Konnichiwa. I would like to start off by saying that the repetition in this really works. I especially like how it is repeated at the beginning and at the end. ...

Hello. As the others have said, you have repeated "eyes full of loneliness" too often. If you want to say it so many times, I suggest integrating it to other ...

Okay, I'm here as resquested. ^_~ I shall...crit like always! The blade pierced into my chest shedding a thousand crimson tear drops onto the ground. I love this sentence. My ...