Prospekt42

Hello! :) So I noticed quite a few things when I was reading your story. I'll just talk about some of the main problems I found. Overall, you tend to ...

Hey! :) So, I challenged myself to write something in present tense (since I mostly write in past tense) and this is what resulted. I'd really like some critique on ...

Hey there! :D Personally, this story was a little melodramatic for my tastes, and I feel like you tried too hard to fit your story with the song lyrics to ...

Overall I thought this was an okay poem. Not great, but not horrible either. However, I felt like your rhyme scheme was forced. For example: But I hope you're happy ...

Honestly, I didn't think this was very good. You obviously have an decent grasp on sentence structure and language, however you seem to use a lot of words that are, ...

My character would be up for it too, I suppose :roll: :lol:

Hey, it's okay about being English cause I'm Northern Irish, so we'll be posting at the same time :lol:

Bonnie, do you think Hinata and Piper could be partners? :D

Name: Piper Eriksson Age: 17 Gender: Female Appearance: Short (about 5’3” although she always wears heels). She has natural ash blonde hair and bright blue eyes. She doesn’t often wear ...

Save me a spot, please, for a Hunter ;)

Can some one please do me the favour of killing off my character? :(

**Wait, why is Gale dead? :? **

**seriously has no idea what's going on**

Violet I surveyed the scene in horror. It had all happened so fast. In an instant, Hinata had vanished. And then, just as suddenly, Peyton had conjured up a nightmare ...

I feel the same Bonnie. I think that both of us should wait until we use our characters again because we still need to hear what Theo's thinking right now, ...