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Re: Fantasy story using snowflake technique
Hi. I've found that it is harder to write after you plot and outline and all that stuff. You do all that stuff and it takes a while to get ...
May 9, 2006 -
Re: The Story
This was a story that I wrote a few years ago. I hope that you enjoy it. It was early, but nevertheless, Bob woke totally refreshed. He had taken Friday ...
May 7, 2006 -
Re: Vedic Beliefs
It was very good, but it seems like it was a school paper. Try to make it a little more conversational. This might make more people read it. I have ...
May 7, 2006 -
Re: Chapter One
I wuld have to agree with everything that IceCreamMan said. I really enjoyed teh story otherwise and felt that you described everything very well. ( I'm a stickler for description.) ...
May 7, 2006 -
Re: Apocalypse: Snoink's Rampage
OK, this story was so stupid it was funny. I think you could have described the main "characters a bit more, but then, that's just me. I liked it for ...
May 7, 2006 -
Re: A Reason for Fire, Chapter 3: Past is Future
Malik Kahliel woke up in a hospital bed, an iv in his arm. He pushed himself up onto his elbows and looked around. There was a screen up near the ...
May 4, 2006 -
Re: A Reason for Fire, Chapter 2: Eas Quo
It was late, the sky dark save for the moon and the fiery engines of the warships. They rocketed away from Earth, their engines roaring at full speed. They headed ...
May 4, 2006 -
Re: Portrait in Twilight: The Butterfly
It was good, but a little too sureal. It was sort of weird. If there aren't animals and stuff, why is there a butterfly? Other than that, I thoguht it ...
May 3, 2006 -
Re: Top 5 Best Books
My five favorite books are: 1: The Faded Sun Trilogy by C.J. Cherryh 2: any of the Thomas Covanent Books by Stephen Donaldson 3: Dune by Frank Herbert 4: 1984 ...
May 3, 2006 -
Re: Lone Lee
It was good, but you don't like rhyming and rhythm do you? In the beginning, themselves should be himself or herself depending. Other than that, it was very good. :)
May 2, 2006 -
Re: YWS Needs A Mascot!
There is no point to having a mascot unless its something really cool like a dragon. It has to be one of those chinese dragons. :D :D
May 2, 2006 -
Re: A Reason for Fire, Chapter 1: A Reason for Fire
Sorry about that. When I go to edit it, all of the paragraphs are where they are supposed to be. I have no clue why. :? :? :?
May 1, 2006 -
Re: A Reason for Fire, Chapter 1: A Reason for Fire
It was a sunny day in New york. The white paved streets snaked through the city, light traffic humming along, heading for various destinations. From an Earthquake two hundred years ...
May 1, 2006 -
Re: Antechamber to Unreality
As Zanyplebeian said, this was very complex. It was sort of hard to understand. but I liked it anyway. Very good job :D :D
May 1, 2006 -
Re: Ode to John Keats
First of all, I have no idea who John Keats was and second, I have no idea what that story was. I didn't get it at all. Please explain it ...
May 1, 2006