Prosithion

Thank you for the marvelous crit!

Here's my crit for Chapter 2: He stared around the courtyard in a "this is it?" kind of way change "in a" to "with a"; change "kind of way" to ...

I LOVED IT!!!!! There were a few grammatical errors, but I can overlook that because this story was absolutely wonderful. POST ANOTHER ONE! It is smashing!

PICK ME!!!! I'll do it.

it's sort of pointless, if you ask me.

I'm preparing myself for the plunge. I am determined to get this done this year. I've been working on it since March, but haven't gotten anywhere. Now, I'll make a ...

welcome, welcome. Always great to have a wonderful writer on the site.

Happy Halloween and welcome to the site. interesting name.

It was a school assignment. There was no point, but I thank you for the crit anyway.

Here's my crit for chapter 1: For a moment, he considered the hailstone again. "Tanner." should be a comma after again. same here: She averted her gaze."I know... comma after ...

Hello. ... interesting avvie

The wind howled in great gusts, blowing snow and ice against the base of a cliff. A figurein a white parka, huddled at the base of a narrow road. The ...

hello, enjoy yourself here.

Frealand returned with his bag and set it up on the table and pulled out three guns, wrapped in cloth. The first gun was a standard Delta issue Colt .45 ...

That was what got me confused