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I edited the ending with one I had. How is it now?

interesting, but why is is rated R? The rhyming and rhythym are a little bit... convoluted. You may want to touch up on that. Pretty good

Unfortunately, I have the same problem. My book's title has nothing to do with the story, but it did a while ago. I just can't get myself to get rid ...

What I do is let my writing go for a while. Usually, If Istart having writer's block, I just put my work away for a few days, and then, when ...

go to this link. It is very very hlpful: Just click the origin you want.

what's really the point? I mean, You can just get on at any computer with internet service. I guess it won't matter much, but it seems a waste of your ...

I agree with Smanda4. It is short and to the point. Other than a few errors in rhythym, it is nice and reads interestingly. good job

umm,interesting, but it invokes an image so sureal, that it's hard to imagine properly. Tone it down a little. Perhaps change the format. Reading it as one big stanza is... ...

Interesting image that you created, but oh my God! There isn't any rhyhming. It's very choppy and there isn't flow. If you can change those things, this could be a ...

It's abstract art. I've never thought of Abstract art as art, but it technically is. Not bad. You could sell it for millions of dollars. Just make up something, like ...

piano keys

Uh, probably my sight. I couldn't stand not being mobile. -Searin I don't care. Probably... uh... my ability to walk. It won't then affect my ability to govern. -Ralian If ...

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Interesdting name, Flem. Welcome to the site.

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