Prosithion

“Well, I better go,” I say, knowing that being late for detention wouldn't be the best way to begin detention. I kiss him goodbye and walk to detention with him ...

This was interesting. As it was mentioned before, you don't really draw the reader in, with the first paragraph. You need a good hook to grab their attention. I was ...

My goal is at least 35, but that's a lot of reviews.

I'm from Central PA, and a lot of our slang is peppered with Slavic words. Like, we say pumika, instead of dishcloth, and dreshlak instead of colander. (my transliterations of ...

All done. (I did all three chapters for you) next?

This chapter was ok, but I didn't quite like is as much as the first two. By the time he woke up, the blood should have mostly been dry. I ...

I'm back! I liked this chapter even more then the first one. There was lots more action to keep the reader involved, and it flowed better. I think that Mrs. ...

Hmm, this was interesting. I like the plot. It's interesting, and pulls you in. The main thing is the science. Now, you can ignore this, I just can't really get ...

All done. Any more?

I liked it, but there are a few things that I want to point out. First, you need to space it out a little more. My eyes were going buggy, ...

5/10, I don't know what Flyleaf is.

Hi all, I figured that I'm doing a lot of reviews anyway, so I might as well take requests. I specialize in Science Fiction, but I'll critique most regular and ...

hmm, I liked this, but it was very depressing. I'm all depressed now. On to the critique. Some of the rhythym and rhymes seem forced, try having it flow a ...

Well, I'm gonna make both the attempt to make the most reviews, but also to thereby get my total number of posts over 1001. We'll see. That's a lot of ...

Hey, I was wondering if you could critique a scene from my novella 'In Defense of Our Nation'. I would suggest scene 1, but I'll leave that up to you. ...