ProfessorRabbit

“New York can drown.” Felix Antsworth murmured, dropping his books on the cement sidewalk. They were worn and overpriced college texts, stuffed with a maelstrom of notes. The rumpled papers ...

You say that you never know whether a paragraph is too short or too long. Just a hint: when reading on a computer screen, shorter is better. I'll suggest some ...

I had to do a project on this one for school, freshman year. We had to make an interpretive video about it. I have to say, I was pretty thoroughly ...

I knew the ending the minute I saw "bride-to-be" and "uniform." However, I do like your use of repetition. The way you use the same descriptor ( "bright, crisp Sunday ...

In line 2, I'd suggest removing the comma. Now, as far as narration here, the 2nd and 3rd lines seem out of place. It would make more sense if they ...

Only one thing: "Dying while writing this rhyme" The words "while writing" slow down the rhythm of this poem. I'd suggest something like this: "Dying as I write this rhyme." ...

Okay. I'll start with some fixes: "I clutched my jacket tightly as a bone-chilling breeze went through the now abandoned streets. It once had been a grand city with neon ...