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Hi I liked this story, it was a good idea and very enjoyable to read. The beggining is very good as it makes the readers think that they are really ...

I was just wondering if it is a good idea to write some parts of a novel in diary entries and letters.

Link: Summary: Boy falls in love with boy against his religion and conflict begins. Could you look at everything, please, a general overview, and comments on the characters and narrative. ...

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SIX When it came to the issue of sex, Mum and Dad supplied Vivian and me with the information. They gave us a couple of books to read on the ...

I chose this because I was intrigued by the interesting title. It was good and the main character was well drawn, however I thought it ended too soon. I thought ...

Hi This was good except it was a bit short. Some plot lines are not fully explained, like the mention of Tom's son. This could probably have been expanded a ...

THREE At lunch I went to the canteen. Norma went down to the pub with some other friends. I took my packed lunch out of my rucksack, said grace and ...

Hey This was going great. So where's the rest of it??? You have created a strong MC who is in an interesting situation, but what is it? Why can she ...

Title: With Mankind as with Womankind Genre: Romantic Summary: A gay teenger struggles to fit in with his family and church while coping with his feelings for an older student. ...

Title: With Mankind as with Womankind Genre: Romantic Link: Thanks! :D

Hi It was as if Arizona was born on fire This seems a bit awkward and unnecessary. Change it to something else, or delete it. lye her reflection]/quote] this should ...

ONE The bus pulled to a stop.I got off , thanked the driver and started to walk across the road to our house. It had started to rain. I could ...

Hi This sounds like an interesting idea. I couldn't find any errors in it. The main character Zackaria is well developed and you do a good job of describing her ...