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Re: Broken Pieces. Prologue
Heyy, I really liked this. It was very beautifully written; it flowed so well. :) I saw just a few mistakes that theotherone already pointed out. Very interesting, I look ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Away, Away Chapter 2
Hey there, I liked this!! It was really nice, very realistic. I just love your description :) Brisa's character seems to be a little contradictory, or maybe it's just me. ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Away, Away Chapter 1
Hey! I love the characters. :P They sound so cute, their friendship is so sweet. Oh, and I LOVE the two paragraphs at the end, simply amazing description. But the ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Battlefield of Love Prologue
Hey there, The story looks good..but I agree with the above reviews. Their feelings, what they're saying, it's kind of unrealistic. Use the show-don't-tell rule, I guess, and make their ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Dianna McKenna
Heya, The idea looks nice. But, (in my opinion, don't hate!) I thought the dialogue was a wee bit fake. It sounded too stiff and unrealistic, especially when Sonya was ...
Jul 23, 2011