Portable_Jukebox

Hello, I thought I would pop by and give a quick critique here. As always, if you have any questions about the following critique or want someone to bounce ideas ...

Pre-Reading: Alright, so this is the revised version of the intro to a story I posted earlier. The description has been minimized, mostly in the area of describing the children. ...

Hey, I really like the premise of the story. Yes, the whole psychic dealing with life and her visions has been done before, but I think you have some ideas ...

OK, overall this piece had a strong emotional pull. I could see what was happening, I could almost feel it. Howerer, there were a couple mistakes and areas in need ...

I liked this. It took me a couple reads, but it grew on me. "Like the houses I used to draw and crawl inside to hide," is probably my favorite ...

I liked this a lot. You used the repetition correctly. You made quick, simple connections that made your argument real and very current. I loved that. However, the poem didn't ...

Like you, I am not quite sure what this is, but to me, that didn't really matter. It was fantastic. I could feel the emotion. I could see the scenes. ...

Pre-reading: This is basically the root of an idea that has been bugging me for months. I'm kind of on the fence about it and am searching for opinions and ...

The main issue I had with this piece was that it was very difficult to read, and not in a good way. The narration made no sense. It was disjointed, ...

Hey, I loved it, and that is actually saying something. I'm really picky about my poetry, but your poem hit all the right notes. I could feel and hear the ...

Very well done and finely written. I felt like the character was telling me the story himself. There were however a few maladies with the writing. Most of those were ...

Interesting beginning, I have to say. The main problems I saw were that your sentences sound a bit choppy sometimes and a few don't make that much sense. These problems ...

Thanks for the welcome everyone. I wirte fiction in most sub-genres, but poetry is a little out of my league. See you guys around. :D

Hey everyone! I used to be a member about three years ago. Life caught me and I was unable to actually write for a while. I have been able to ...

Hey everyone! I used to be a member about three years ago. Life caught me and I was unable to actually write for a while. I have been able to ...