PoetMan111

Putting "quote unquote" in quotations was redundant, which was exactly the point of putting them in quotations. I will agree, however, that there are a few too many quotes (most ...

Thanks! Originally, that last paragraph wasn't the same at all. It discussed the Old Woman working until her eventual death, rather than talking about any of the other characters. When ...

Thank you very much! I wasn't sure about a lot of it for various reasons. One being that there are a lot of sentences that run on a bit, and ...

@ajt- Honestly, the zombie thing was done because I didn't want to spend too much time on the description. It was written for a contest, and I had about a ...

@Kyllorac- Yeah, The pacing was a huge problem. I knew that when I was writing the story. I wrote this for a contest (I think the word cap was 5000 ...