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yeah o.k. bad first attempt but i'll try again!

It's not 100% editted but i hope you like it Chapter 1: the begginings On the planet marcadus, there rages a never ending battle intertwined with the earth, our earth. ...

Major thing: what the heck is that monster, describe it you say it has a stench it's tall and it's got a really deadly poison but with that you can ...

what the last guy said is all true and she pointed out basically all of the issues. The other thing i would like to point out is as follows: there ...