Pippiedooda

Just read the prologue properly and I'm liking that too! Things make more sense now - I half skimmed it when I first went to read chapter one because I ...

Hi good story! I'm liking it so far, is this the beginning? I think it would work well if it is because you could do all the explaining later :D ...

Hello me again :) I think you have done a lot of improving and its definetly better!! I've noticed a couple of things that I'll point out but overall much ...

Hi again, I liked the changes! :) Like i said before, the stroy is great, i only have a couple more comments on things that could be improved, and thats ...

Thanx thefireinmeisJC for commenting my work! It is definetly my weakness in writing to include too much description, next time i am going to have to put a reign on ...