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Ah, I see. It did do that, just a little too strongly. :P I had to re-read it when I managed to get the tune out of my head, since ...

Thanks seeminglymeaningless! Mmmh, I going to work on changing that last stanza now, it's really annoying me! I did realize that the 'faceless mass' line didn't make sense, but I ...

Hmm, I'll see if I can rearrange it without stuffing the rhymes at the end of each verse. I thought the last verse was preachy too! I'll try to change ...

Thank you!!! :D

Thank you so much!!! I will look into changing those things. I didn't notice before, but now that you've pointed it out, the 'I want to be held' thing does ...

Thank you so much!!! That's really helpful and I will change the things you pointed out. The idea with the 'clumsily' was to show how uncomfortable Sophie's mum is, but ...

Thank you! I've been wanting advice on the speech parts. I knew that I wasn't doing it 'right', but I kinda liked the way the speech merged into the rest ...