Pigeon

Hi! This story is amazing!!! I absolutely love it! I just noticed one thing: But the bouquets only taunted him with fleet beauty that withered by his next visit. "fleet" ...

Thank you!!! :D

Thank you so much!!! I will look into changing those things. I didn't notice before, but now that you've pointed it out, the 'I want to be held' thing does ...

Surrounded by noise And movement And people I can pretend That it's ok. I convince myself Sometimes. But when I'm alone, The truth finds me. It grabs me by the ...

Thank you so much!!! That's really helpful and I will change the things you pointed out. The idea with the 'clumsily' was to show how uncomfortable Sophie's mum is, but ...

Sophie didn't remember much about hospital. What she did remember was a vague collection of scents and sounds and sensations. The sharp smell of disinfectant, the wailing of other kids ...

This is awesome and very beautiful! I've just got one suggestion: The TV flashed at twelve A.M. my room was dark except for the TV. Something about this feels kind ...

OK, I'm not entirely sure what you're meant to say in these things. I think this is really good! We don't usually empathise with the slob on the couch :D ...

Thank you! I've been wanting advice on the speech parts. I knew that I wasn't doing it 'right', but I kinda liked the way the speech merged into the rest ...

I gather them up from the battlefield. Men who come to me wide-eyed with terror and pain. I remember, one of them, he pushed me back. His missus was gonna ...