Pigeon

Thanks seeminglymeaningless! Mmmh, I going to work on changing that last stanza now, it's really annoying me! I did realize that the 'faceless mass' line didn't make sense, but I ...

Hmm, I'll see if I can rearrange it without stuffing the rhymes at the end of each verse. I thought the last verse was preachy too! I'll try to change ...

Hey! This is pigeon, here to review your poem :) air so warm but veins that freeze I love this phrase. It's very pretty and effective. Troubled dream, so cold ...

Walking down forty-second street There are a thousand, thousand feet; All of them marching to the beat Of all the business of the day. I find I’m floating ‘gainst the ...

The theme I got from the random theme generator was: Your story is about an artist in New York City falling down the stairs. Word count: 999 :D Simon awoke ...

Hey Lynlyn! Sorry, I don't really have anything to suggest - I don't know anything about cancer or film production either, and I loved the whole story, no nit-picks or ...

This is a really beautiful poem, even though it's about an ugly topic. I love the images you use. The thing I would suggest is that these verses: I’ve held ...

Hey Jon! I'm not entirely sure what this is about, but I still loved it! It made me happy. :D The images you create are beautiful, my favorite being 'soft ...

Hey! I'm pigeon. I really liked this, but there's a few things you need to fix up Five P.M. and I'm finally on the road, after another long day in ...

I gave you my heart, Knowing you would break it. Hoping that, While it was still intact, It would be in the hands Of someone worthy. But in the end ...

I like the rhythm you've chosen with the five and seven syllable lines, and I think it's a pretty story, even if it's a bit cliched. Your grammar seems fine, ...

I really like this! It sets up a very interesting story and makes me want to know more! The only error I noticed was People—men and women—found yourself fascinated by ...

Hi! I like the basic idea of this poem, and I didn't notice anything wrong with your grammar, which is good :) Your descriptions involve sight, hearing, touch, taste and ...

Hi! I thought this was great! A sense of character is developed very quickly by the way the main character cares so much about his sister, and the situation of ...

“Do you love me?” he whispers, like a child seeking reassurance from his mother, “do you love me?” She reaches out a pale hand and strokes his hair. “Of course ...