PickledChrissy

Thanks! I get to work on it.

Thanks for the review! :D

Thanks for another great review, Alias!

Thanks, Icy! I will try to fix the part where she pressed a little closer to him. I meant it more as shrinking away from the sun, not snuggling. And ...

Thanks, Alias! I wasn't quite happy with this chapter, but was experiencing difficulty when I attempted to brush it up. You really helped.

Thank you! I'll fix the part with third person.

Thanks for the review! It helps a lot. :)

Thanks for the review, Icy! I'll try to work on the pacing. And I will try to fix the beginning.

Okay, Thanks, Icy! I'll work on the dialogue.

Thank, Lightsong! I'll work on that part.

Thanks, Lightsong! I'll shorten the next chapter I post on here. And I'll also adjust that one comment of the mom's. Thanks again! :D

Thanks!

One other question. What do you think of the names? I got some negative feedback from family on them, but I really liked both of them, so... What is your ...

Thank you for the review! I'll work on the little bits you pointed out.

Thanks, herbgirl! I never liked the very beginning, never could get it to sound quite right. However, your suggestion improves it a great deal. Thanks you!